On Mon, Aug 10, 2015 at 8:42 AM, sajolida <sajolida@???> wrote:
> Austin English:
>> On Sun, Aug 9, 2015 at 6:42 AM, sajolida <sajolida@???> wrote:
>>> Austin English:
>>>> On Aug 8, 2015 11:30 AM, "intrigeri" <intrigeri@???> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>>> Consider using <a
>>>>>> href='https://www.virtualbox.org/'>VirtualBox</a> instead.
>>>>>
>>>>> I'd rather move this one to the doc page about virtualization (linked
>>>>> below), which will give us more room to warn agains the non-free
>>>>> extension pack that's featured quite prominently on their download
>>>>> page. That would be the second modification needed there, to make it
>>>>> consistent with what Austin English is implementing.
>>>>>
>>>>> Thoughts?
>>>
>>> Ok, so adjusting my last proposal we could:
>>>
>>> 1. Change the title into "Warning: non-free virtual machine detected!"
>>>
>>> 2. Change the body into:
>>>
>>> "Both the host operating system and the virtualization software are
>>> able to monitor what you are doing in Tails.
>>>
>>> Additionally, only free software, both as operating system and
>>> virtualization software, can be trustworthy.
>>> <a
>>> href='file:///usr/share/doc/tails/website/doc/advanced_topics/virtualization.en.html#security'>Learn
>>> more...</a>
>>>
>>> That's better, no?
>>
>> That phrasing sounds awkward to me. How about:
>> "Both the host operating system and the virtualization software are
>> able to monitor what you are doing in Tails.
>>
>> Only free software can be considered trustworthy, for both the host
>> operating system and the virtualization software.
>>
>> <a href='file:///usr/share/doc/tails/website/doc/advanced_topics/virtualization.en.html#security'>Learn
>> more...</a>
>>
>> Still not perfect, but it's an awkward sentence to try to phrase.
>
> Fine with me, especially if you're a native speaker. I don't know if
> that's your case, but personally I'm not :)
Yes, I am :). It sounds more natural to me than your suggestion,
though there's definitely room for improvement on it, as it sounds a
bit awkward.
Updated patch attached:
https://labs.riseup.net/code/attachments/download/884/updated-warning.txt
--
-Austin
