Hi,
sorry, I've been pretty busy these last days.
sajolida@??? wrote:
> u wrote:
>> sajolida@??? wrote:
>>> I already have a draft, so only review is needed now:
>>>
>>> http://git.tails.boum.org/tails/tree/wiki/src/news/who_are_you_helping.mdwn?h=web/8213-call-for-donations
>>
>> I copied it here : https://pad.riseup.net/p/tailsdonate and tried to
>> simplify the intro text a little bit (before the quotes from the ground).
>
> Why not use Git instead? It makes it easier for me to review your changes.
Will do that next time.
>> For texts addressing people (not supporting organizations), I strongly
>> believe in George Orwell's writing rules [1] and thus tried to shorten
>> some sentences as this makes it easier to read.
>
> So do I, and that's why I asked for a review because this work is better
> achieved with 4 eyes than 2. Thanks for you simplifications!
:)
> Regarding the first paragraph I meant to give two strong argument to
> explain why Tails is free software: first security, and second we really
> want it to be free of charge (even if not for security). You removed
> that argument I think. So I changed that sentence to be "But also
> because we think that nobody should have to pay to be safe while using
> computers." I hope it's better now.
>
> I merged that with your other simplifications in bea79e3.
Great.
>
> I also reverted your capitalization on "Starting a revolution With
> technology" as both Tails and the original article use sentence-style
> capitalization. See
> https://tails.boum.org/contribute/how/documentation/guidelines/#index2h1.
ok.
[..]
More comments on tails-dev if I have something else to say about the
layout :)
Thanks for working on this.
u.
