I sent this to tails-dev, but forgot to put you in Cc.
On 16/09/13 21:27, sajolida@??? wrote:
> I had a look at the work done on the doc/cold-boot-attack branch. I'm
> very happy to see new people taking initiatives regarding the
> documentation lately. I pushed it to the main repo.
>
> Regarding the structure, I felt that it was talking about two things
> that could be better separated or advertised:
>
> - memory wipe on shutdown
> - emergency shutdown
>
> I'd be tempted to move the emergency shutdown to the "First steps"
> section. And rename that page "Memory wipe on shutdown" and still have
> it in the "Advanced topics" section. What do you think?
>
> Regarding formatting:
>
> - The link to cold-boot attack on Wikipedia is broken.
> - I'd add a link to Wikipedia on the first occurrence of "RAM".
> - I'd use a class="bug" section when mentioning the emergency
> shutdown bug after using Tails USB Installer.
>
> Regarding terminology:
>
> - I'd say "RAM" instead of "the RAM".
> - Don't use "junk", "random data" might do the trick instead.
> - Please use a spell checker on your pages before pushing them!
> with Vim do `:set spell spelllang=en`.
>
> Does that make sense?
